• I think you've got a good start, but you might want to consider changing the first description of "any apple" to match the later mentioned "granny smith". Having two different phrases like that doesn't let it flow as easily as it could. I'd also substitute the word "nose" for "nostrils" - as most people don't use the term nostrils in daily conversation. "I let the sweet taste of the apple sink into my taste buds. The mellow scent of a granny smith flies though my nose."

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